1. Find something on the main floor of the HFAC and look at it until you have connected it to something deeply rooted in your soul. It must be something you find in a physical location, not something you search for on a device. (Is it a piece of art that parallels your religious beliefs? Is it an askew tile in the ceiling that coincides with how you feel in social situations? Is it a person showing such earnestness in his or her actions that you feel inspired to be better or different?) Study this thing until you’ve really given all your emotions to it.
2. Now write exactly ten words that come close to showing a) how you feel and b) what you’re seeing.
The Market. Looks are deceiving, you never know their life.
LOVE the comma split! Idk if you did this on purpose, but while you technically used a comma incorrectly, it comes across as very intentional and almost rhythmic. I really really like the use of "you," which pulls me, as the reader, into the sentence in a really unexpected and arresting way.
ReplyDeleteWhat if there was a picture accompanying this? I know that wasn't part of the assignment, but it IS a pretty abstract sentence and I think a picture would help clarify without being too on-the-nose, you know?
Allie: In addition to specifying taking a photo, what else can be included in your instructions to help the responses be as abstract or concrete as you'd like? Or is there benefit to leaving this open-ended?
ReplyDeleteEmily: I like the artistic/poetic approach you took. Do you feel that the abstract approach serves your experience and feelings best? How would that change if it was more concrete?